Reilith
Sage
I am having a little problem. My new project is going well, even with my lack of time, but one thing from the start of the story is bugging me to the point I can't ignore it. So I come to you for help!
In the first chapter, there are multiple scenes, each one with one MC's POV. Now the problem is that I am writing this fully in their POV, so there is no storyteller sort of speaking. And I hate describing MC's the way they see themselves. I don't mind an adjective here and there, but full blows descriptions of the MC whose POV it is in the scene is something I am not keen on. So, would it be too much if the actual full description (eyes, face, hair, body etc.) happened later in the chapter, or even in the second one, so I can get the MC's in the same scene where they can look at each other with their own eyes?
Example:
Wade looked at Mark. Mark was not high, but had a nice stocky build, brown eyes and black hair topped with a scruffy beard.
Mark looked at Wade, noticing that Wade was balding. He had big eyes and nose, but his smile was warm and friendly.
The only other idea I have is for the MC's to look in the mirror too much, and that breaks pace.
Or am I over-thinking this simple problem that could be solved with embellished storytelling and half MC POV and half omnipresent storyteller?
Sorry if it's not explained properly, I am writing in a hurry.
Thanks in advance!
In the first chapter, there are multiple scenes, each one with one MC's POV. Now the problem is that I am writing this fully in their POV, so there is no storyteller sort of speaking. And I hate describing MC's the way they see themselves. I don't mind an adjective here and there, but full blows descriptions of the MC whose POV it is in the scene is something I am not keen on. So, would it be too much if the actual full description (eyes, face, hair, body etc.) happened later in the chapter, or even in the second one, so I can get the MC's in the same scene where they can look at each other with their own eyes?
Example:
Wade looked at Mark. Mark was not high, but had a nice stocky build, brown eyes and black hair topped with a scruffy beard.
Mark looked at Wade, noticing that Wade was balding. He had big eyes and nose, but his smile was warm and friendly.
The only other idea I have is for the MC's to look in the mirror too much, and that breaks pace.
Or am I over-thinking this simple problem that could be solved with embellished storytelling and half MC POV and half omnipresent storyteller?
Sorry if it's not explained properly, I am writing in a hurry.
Thanks in advance!