Incanus
Auror
I’ve been working on a handful of chapters lately that have a niggling little problem. Technically I’m revising, but there is so much fresh material that it really feels like a first draft.
Anyway, the nature of this part of the story requires some smallish segments and short scenes. The problem is in the way I’ve linked many of these bits together. It’s really bad tell-y kind of stuff, variations of “Later that night/After they had started moving again/While they took a short break”, etc.
It’s really awful stuff, very ‘first-draft’. But I feel a need to bring up how much time has passed, or how much later one segment is in relation to another.
So my questions: are there other, better techniques for accomplishing this sort of thing? Or, do I even need to include these factoids at all?
Related questions: Would breaks in the narrative work, to imply the passage of time? What about using blank spaces, or the ‘three asterisks’ thing-y, in the text, to break up the narrative that way? Is there a difference between those two things?
Why am I so hung up on this? Am I over-thinking again?
Anyway, the nature of this part of the story requires some smallish segments and short scenes. The problem is in the way I’ve linked many of these bits together. It’s really bad tell-y kind of stuff, variations of “Later that night/After they had started moving again/While they took a short break”, etc.
It’s really awful stuff, very ‘first-draft’. But I feel a need to bring up how much time has passed, or how much later one segment is in relation to another.
So my questions: are there other, better techniques for accomplishing this sort of thing? Or, do I even need to include these factoids at all?
Related questions: Would breaks in the narrative work, to imply the passage of time? What about using blank spaces, or the ‘three asterisks’ thing-y, in the text, to break up the narrative that way? Is there a difference between those two things?
Why am I so hung up on this? Am I over-thinking again?