Even with the best of the suggested rewrites people have made, if I picked up this book off a shelf in a store, I would put it back at the word universe. It emphasizes weak worldbuilding over character.
When the alien intruders spread a net of sickness and deceit over Britain and beyond, the orange witch has seven days to stop them. Will she be able to overcome her internal struggles and prove that she has what it takes to thwart the alien sorcerers? Or will she succumb to the weakness of her internal struggles while Britain burns.
Something like that, but longer and more specific.
When the alien intruders spread a net of sickness and deceit over Britain and beyond, the orange witch has seven days to stop them. Will she be able to overcome her internal struggles and prove that she has what it takes to thwart the alien sorcerers? Or will she succumb to the weakness of her internal struggles while Britain burns.
Something like that, but longer and more specific.