I'm re-writing my opening scene. Again. I think from now on instead of saying I'm a writer I'll say I'm a re-writer. Wormtongue the Fantasy Re-writer.
Writing IS rewriting. Like it or not, the real work in writing is done in rewriting and editing process.
In my defense, I'm an engineer and a tech writer and I'm well trained to write sentences that tell.
Yeah, I hear you. I have a degree in CompSci, so I've spent a lot of time writing reports for physics, chem, and biology classes. Everything in the lab reports I use to write was in passive voice, which is perfectly fine for those things, but that form of writing doesn't exactly get the blood flowing for most people, and is the worst form of sentence construction for storytelling.