Hello,
I have been a long time lurker, as the saying goes. I have created this account to ask any one of you intelligent ladies and gents (the ole' flattery approach) who have experience in writing or reading fantasy for a piece of advice.
Just under half of my first piece of fantasy fiction concerns the son of the protagonist and his take on the events that are unfolding. At the halfway point of his plot, his mother is attacked (defending him), struck on the head and reduced to what we would call a vegetative state (and what is known in the story as the waking-dream).
It is a no - or perhaps low - magic setting but the boy sets off after this to find the "magic" that will cure his Mother. Dissapointment after dissapointment leads to a climax - I feel - is effective and compliments the story of the other protagonist (the boy's Father) well.
The doubt I am having is this. It feels like the point of high-drama (His Mother near-killed by assassins before his eyes) is in the middle of the novel and that the chapters following betray the 'increasing conflict' rule. The boy is certainly going through his own inner-conflict as he tries to measure what he has just experienced. Also, as it becomes clear that there isn't really magic, his hopes of 'making everything right with a magic potion' start to fade, adding to his sorrow.
Again, I just cannot get over this high-point of drama being in the middle of the story. I have tried reimagining the story so that the Mother being struck is the inciting incident but that throws everything off whack. I have reintroduced the assassins that attacked his family as antagonists in the chapters following their initial attack to add another element of drama but I am just really stricken by doubts (60k words in too)
Should I rewrite this entire thing and if so, how?
Can the story work the way it is?
Any help you can offer will be greatly appreciated,
thank you.
I have been a long time lurker, as the saying goes. I have created this account to ask any one of you intelligent ladies and gents (the ole' flattery approach) who have experience in writing or reading fantasy for a piece of advice.
Just under half of my first piece of fantasy fiction concerns the son of the protagonist and his take on the events that are unfolding. At the halfway point of his plot, his mother is attacked (defending him), struck on the head and reduced to what we would call a vegetative state (and what is known in the story as the waking-dream).
It is a no - or perhaps low - magic setting but the boy sets off after this to find the "magic" that will cure his Mother. Dissapointment after dissapointment leads to a climax - I feel - is effective and compliments the story of the other protagonist (the boy's Father) well.
The doubt I am having is this. It feels like the point of high-drama (His Mother near-killed by assassins before his eyes) is in the middle of the novel and that the chapters following betray the 'increasing conflict' rule. The boy is certainly going through his own inner-conflict as he tries to measure what he has just experienced. Also, as it becomes clear that there isn't really magic, his hopes of 'making everything right with a magic potion' start to fade, adding to his sorrow.
Again, I just cannot get over this high-point of drama being in the middle of the story. I have tried reimagining the story so that the Mother being struck is the inciting incident but that throws everything off whack. I have reintroduced the assassins that attacked his family as antagonists in the chapters following their initial attack to add another element of drama but I am just really stricken by doubts (60k words in too)
Should I rewrite this entire thing and if so, how?
Can the story work the way it is?
Any help you can offer will be greatly appreciated,
thank you.