In my NIP I am experimenting with a technique that leaves certain speakers of a group anonymous to the the reader. Just wondering if this would p*** anyone off to come across in a novel:
He stumbled between the cells, weary as he was bloody, and twice as frightened. Behind rusted bars men watched and whispered, individual faces left featureless by the stagnant gloom.
'What happened to him?'
'Where are the guards?'
'Boy, how'd you get free?'
'Must have jumped them and taken their keys.'
'Unlock my door, you little c***!'
'No, open mine.'
'Come back here...'
He ignored them all and struggled on, gaze fixed on the growing square of light. Soon he would be free.
(Just a random example by the way) I want to include dialogue, but not necessarily all the actions or descriptions it would take to identify the different speakers.
Thanks in advance.
He stumbled between the cells, weary as he was bloody, and twice as frightened. Behind rusted bars men watched and whispered, individual faces left featureless by the stagnant gloom.
'What happened to him?'
'Where are the guards?'
'Boy, how'd you get free?'
'Must have jumped them and taken their keys.'
'Unlock my door, you little c***!'
'No, open mine.'
'Come back here...'
He ignored them all and struggled on, gaze fixed on the growing square of light. Soon he would be free.
(Just a random example by the way) I want to include dialogue, but not necessarily all the actions or descriptions it would take to identify the different speakers.
Thanks in advance.