Garren Jacobsen
Auror
Ok guys, so earlier I was writing a scene about a politician that was reflecting on his current position in life. He's part of a worthless committee whereas the legislators elected his same year are getting prestigious appointments. The reason is because he is a malcontent and refused to vote for a bill that the legislative leadership wanted but that the public didn't. He followed the public and was punished for it.
While reflecting on this he concludes that the reason is because the other legislators "never thought of thinking for themselves at all." This is a call back to "When I was a lad" from Gilbert and Sullivan's HMS Pinafore. The setting is not earth and this is line occurs in narration not a direct thought nor a direct quote.
Would such a line pull you out of the story or would you gloss over it without a second thought?
While reflecting on this he concludes that the reason is because the other legislators "never thought of thinking for themselves at all." This is a call back to "When I was a lad" from Gilbert and Sullivan's HMS Pinafore. The setting is not earth and this is line occurs in narration not a direct thought nor a direct quote.
Would such a line pull you out of the story or would you gloss over it without a second thought?