LuciferXerxes
Acolyte
Hello! I am relatively new to this site, but not to writing. I have been working on a pseudo-fantasy concept for a while, and I would like some feedback on my core ideas. I don't know if this is the place for dropping all my ideas, so if it fits in a better place, do tell me.
I don't know how well I can format this, so I will just talk about the ideas I have.
I am leaving out major details for some things, so if I need clarifying, or if you have any questions, do ask. I have worked out a lot of this. Sorry for wall of text, I tried to format it some.
First off, it isn't traditional magic. Instead of all kinds of powers, it is more grounded in a specific reality. In order to use any power, you must have a Void Rune tattooed somewhere on your body, where you will use it. (Mainly the arm). Void runes are alchemy like circles that act as 'portals' to an alternate dimension called The Void(More on that later). also, they all for the most part look the same. a large circle, with one smaller circle in the center, and three around it. the three circles each hold a symbol for Body, Mind, and Void. the middle holds the rune for what you are using.
I don't want to limit it too much, but the main abilities are: Fire, Lightning, Earth, And Ice.
there is also an abiilty, Flesh, which is used to create weapons from your own body.
These can be adapted with specialized runes to do different things.
In addition, it strains the body. the more you have you more stress your body is under, therefore extensive training is needed for extreme amounts, like full body armor, etc.
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So, two ancient space faring races that exclusively used Void runes for everything, never needing to advance in normal technology. Eventually, both races gained immense power, and the leaders of both races became Godlike.
One race, The Kylothians, Large, muscular, and humanlike, became what I call 'angelic' They stood for order, and the 7 Virtues. The Leader was Named Kyon. The other race, Vaiisks, Tall and thin beings with extremely long and thin ears, became demented, and stood for the Seven Sins. Their leader was Ais'fer. Both races soon found each other, and waged war for thousands of years. Eventually what was left of both races, including their leaders, became stranded on a single planet. The two race's leaders made a pact; Their race was weak, and had sacrificed so much. They merged their souls together and created two new species. the Kyn (Humans, Pronounced kin) and Ailf (Elves). They taught the first generation how to use Void runes, and then pulled away. The Kylothians all died out, but the Vaiisks still had some power, and inhabited their own small continent far to the east.
Religion has a lot to do with government and how they live their lives.
The Kylothians had seven virtues. Chastity, Temperance, Charity, Diligence, Patience, Kindness, and Humility. These seven virtues become the seven branches of their government. In addition, the Vaiisks had seven sins. Lust, Gluttony, Greed, Sloth, Wrath, Envy, and Pride, Respectively. These values are not seen as something to be unmade; Instead, they are set aside as necessary evils. In addition to the normal military, each Sin has a special branch.
In the beginning, both races grew similarly to their origins. Both follow the Teachings, and started close. But eventually some parts of both races came to dislike each other. a splinter of radical Ailfs packed up and moved to a small continent to the east. Meanwhile, something massive was approaching from the sky. A massive needle like ship was crashing down. Ais'fer, in her own continent attempted to shoot it down, but only partially damaged it. it crashed in the south, and released something. 3/4ths of the total populations of both Kyn and Ailf species, instantly became unable to use any Void circle. Now, up to this point Tech was extremely minor in favor of Void circles. This event led to a massive rise of technology.
One country, Vaus'gur took advantage of this, and gathered a massive military of normal soldiers, and most of the Void circle users left, and waged war on the Radical Ailf Nation. The ailfs, given time to advance their own circles and tech in secret, stood on even ground.
Up to this point the Flesh circles weren't used at all by any races. Only the remaining Vaiisks could use it. The military leaders secretly learned how to use the Flesh void runes from them. Flesh runes allow for weapons and armor made from bone, along with adapting limbs to suit needs. this pushed the military into extreme power, and they soon won the war. They let the Radicals keep their continent, but still held control and kept the ideals the same for them.
tensions are rising between Vaus'gur and the Radical Ailfs. The Remaining Vaiisks are starting to advance closer to the country. And, soon, a massive generation spaceship will come to the planet. They are the ones who sent the Needle that ended most peoples use of Void Runes, and they plan on attacking.
That extra race, was at one time long ago, a race born on the very edge of the universe. Not a single one of them could use Void runes, so they advanced technologically, and created a small empire of their own, peacefully. Then the war between Kylothians and Vaiisks had engulfed one of their worlds.
Enraged, this unknown race grew to hate the two races, and took all their resources and started on a path of war technology. Slowly but surely they advanced in weapons tech, and found a way to advance their lifespan thousands of times. they conquested, hunted the planets with people that could use void runes. They first sent the Needle ahead of their Generation ships, to disable all use of Void Rune use, then when they arrived they warred with any who resisted and brought the rest into their ranks. Now they have their sights on the new planet, The one Kylothians and Vaiisks were left on. They don't expect that the race partially survived the Needle, and have merged tech use and Void rune use.
I'm so sorry for wall of text, But please do read all of it, and tell me about it. I have tried to flesh out almost everything I have listed, so do ask questions. I just want to hear from someone else about this. I also have a basic map made, and have it posted here: http://oi58.tinypic.com/2ywa3co.jpg
I don't know how well I can format this, so I will just talk about the ideas I have.
I am leaving out major details for some things, so if I need clarifying, or if you have any questions, do ask. I have worked out a lot of this. Sorry for wall of text, I tried to format it some.
Magic
:First off, it isn't traditional magic. Instead of all kinds of powers, it is more grounded in a specific reality. In order to use any power, you must have a Void Rune tattooed somewhere on your body, where you will use it. (Mainly the arm). Void runes are alchemy like circles that act as 'portals' to an alternate dimension called The Void(More on that later). also, they all for the most part look the same. a large circle, with one smaller circle in the center, and three around it. the three circles each hold a symbol for Body, Mind, and Void. the middle holds the rune for what you are using.
I don't want to limit it too much, but the main abilities are: Fire, Lightning, Earth, And Ice.
there is also an abiilty, Flesh, which is used to create weapons from your own body.
These can be adapted with specialized runes to do different things.
In addition, it strains the body. the more you have you more stress your body is under, therefore extensive training is needed for extreme amounts, like full body armor, etc.
.
History
So, two ancient space faring races that exclusively used Void runes for everything, never needing to advance in normal technology. Eventually, both races gained immense power, and the leaders of both races became Godlike.
One race, The Kylothians, Large, muscular, and humanlike, became what I call 'angelic' They stood for order, and the 7 Virtues. The Leader was Named Kyon. The other race, Vaiisks, Tall and thin beings with extremely long and thin ears, became demented, and stood for the Seven Sins. Their leader was Ais'fer. Both races soon found each other, and waged war for thousands of years. Eventually what was left of both races, including their leaders, became stranded on a single planet. The two race's leaders made a pact; Their race was weak, and had sacrificed so much. They merged their souls together and created two new species. the Kyn (Humans, Pronounced kin) and Ailf (Elves). They taught the first generation how to use Void runes, and then pulled away. The Kylothians all died out, but the Vaiisks still had some power, and inhabited their own small continent far to the east.
Religion
Religion has a lot to do with government and how they live their lives.
The Kylothians had seven virtues. Chastity, Temperance, Charity, Diligence, Patience, Kindness, and Humility. These seven virtues become the seven branches of their government. In addition, the Vaiisks had seven sins. Lust, Gluttony, Greed, Sloth, Wrath, Envy, and Pride, Respectively. These values are not seen as something to be unmade; Instead, they are set aside as necessary evils. In addition to the normal military, each Sin has a special branch.
Culture
. In the beginning, both races grew similarly to their origins. Both follow the Teachings, and started close. But eventually some parts of both races came to dislike each other. a splinter of radical Ailfs packed up and moved to a small continent to the east. Meanwhile, something massive was approaching from the sky. A massive needle like ship was crashing down. Ais'fer, in her own continent attempted to shoot it down, but only partially damaged it. it crashed in the south, and released something. 3/4ths of the total populations of both Kyn and Ailf species, instantly became unable to use any Void circle. Now, up to this point Tech was extremely minor in favor of Void circles. This event led to a massive rise of technology.
One country, Vaus'gur took advantage of this, and gathered a massive military of normal soldiers, and most of the Void circle users left, and waged war on the Radical Ailf Nation. The ailfs, given time to advance their own circles and tech in secret, stood on even ground.
Up to this point the Flesh circles weren't used at all by any races. Only the remaining Vaiisks could use it. The military leaders secretly learned how to use the Flesh void runes from them. Flesh runes allow for weapons and armor made from bone, along with adapting limbs to suit needs. this pushed the military into extreme power, and they soon won the war. They let the Radicals keep their continent, but still held control and kept the ideals the same for them.
Other things/conflict
It has been many years since the war, and mass industrialization has taken hold. As I said, the setting has WW2 level tech. Early automobiles are becoming a thing, but most travel is done by train or boat. Planes do not exist yet. most combat is done by weapons Similar to WW2 weapons. Not exactly the same in shape, but similar designs. the seven virtues run the government, and the seven sins each run their own elite operations, along with guarding their respective Virtue. The normal military wears mainly military uniform with some armor pieces, and the Sin soldiers wear full body armor.
tensions are rising between Vaus'gur and the Radical Ailfs. The Remaining Vaiisks are starting to advance closer to the country. And, soon, a massive generation spaceship will come to the planet. They are the ones who sent the Needle that ended most peoples use of Void Runes, and they plan on attacking.
That extra race, was at one time long ago, a race born on the very edge of the universe. Not a single one of them could use Void runes, so they advanced technologically, and created a small empire of their own, peacefully. Then the war between Kylothians and Vaiisks had engulfed one of their worlds.
Enraged, this unknown race grew to hate the two races, and took all their resources and started on a path of war technology. Slowly but surely they advanced in weapons tech, and found a way to advance their lifespan thousands of times. they conquested, hunted the planets with people that could use void runes. They first sent the Needle ahead of their Generation ships, to disable all use of Void Rune use, then when they arrived they warred with any who resisted and brought the rest into their ranks. Now they have their sights on the new planet, The one Kylothians and Vaiisks were left on. They don't expect that the race partially survived the Needle, and have merged tech use and Void rune use.
I'm so sorry for wall of text, But please do read all of it, and tell me about it. I have tried to flesh out almost everything I have listed, so do ask questions. I just want to hear from someone else about this. I also have a basic map made, and have it posted here: http://oi58.tinypic.com/2ywa3co.jpg