Androxine Vortex
Archmage
I am trying to make my sentences more fluid and well, just better in general. I often make sentences redundant and have unnecessary words. But should you always try to make your sentences as short as you can? I personally enjoy reading longer sentences because for some reason short sentences seem like they don't really belong. I'm not sure how to describe it but it is like I read a short sentence and feel that it could have been longer to give it more flavor instead of it seeming like it is just a blunt statement. Let's take this sentence I came up with off the top of my head:
"He pulled his sword from its sheath, its surface gleaming in the firelight."
Should you necessarily make it, "He pulled his gleaming sword from its sheath."
To me, the first sentence sounds better because it gives more detail. What's making the sword glimmer? Oh, the firelight. Maybe the reader could deduce that firelight was making the sword's surface glimmer but I think it adds a little bit more color to the sentence.
What are your thoughts? Should you always try to shorten your sentences whenever you possibly can?
"He pulled his sword from its sheath, its surface gleaming in the firelight."
Should you necessarily make it, "He pulled his gleaming sword from its sheath."
To me, the first sentence sounds better because it gives more detail. What's making the sword glimmer? Oh, the firelight. Maybe the reader could deduce that firelight was making the sword's surface glimmer but I think it adds a little bit more color to the sentence.
What are your thoughts? Should you always try to shorten your sentences whenever you possibly can?