I king that is elected every two years? I don't think that makes logical sense, as kingship is hereditary.
Also, how long has this league been around? Do the city states often fight one another? Why hasn't the largest of the city states not taken over the smaller ones? I am not asking you to answer them to me, but did you answer these yourself when you created this world?
I like the concept of city-states. I am using them for a portion of my world now. I like them because they are a source of such pride for each citizen as well as much strife for each city state.
So at the very beggining of time you have a god who is very simmilar to God from the Christian faith (and other faiths). I haven't got a name yet so I will refer to him as God for now. Anyway he creates the universe and the lesser gods who resemble many ancient Greek and Roman gods. God then creates the Averteri, a humanlike race of immortals who are good (no evil in them at all). Their main purpose is to serve the gods. They're also more powerful than your average human.
However god think's something is missing so he makes mankind. However he plants a concept in their mind - evil in it's various forms. For hundreds/thousands of years primitive humans, the Averteri and the lesser gods all live in peace. But eventualy some humans turn evil or show evil qualities. One of the gods, Khrone (name may change) who is not considred to be as mighty as the others wants to prove himself so he studdies this concept of evil.
Eventualy Khrone becomes corrupted and believes that he is more powerful than God. He corrupts many of the lesser gods and even tricks some of the good ones by saying god is actualy evil for creating evil. He then tries to corrup the Averteri but fails because they are only capeable of doing good so therefore completely destroys their minds and plants his own will inside them. Their bodies are then warped and become demonlike.
Next he moves onto mankind. Some are corrupted other are not. Those that are not are swiftly enslave. After years of enslavement mankind and the gods the lesser gods that remained loyal to god fight a massive war against Khrone. They win and God imprisons Khrone and his demons under the Northen wastes. He then gives the keys to mankind to look after which are fragments of a star that additionaly grant cool bennefits as well.
In all fairness, Tolkien didn't exactly create the idea of a fallen figure corrupting others with him, or a war between the gods. Just sayin'. You could say he's working with a fairly standard creation myth (which he is), but I doubt it was Tolkien inspired.
Thanks for the sarcasm it helps, a lot... :tongue:
Right let me clear thing up a bit. Firstly there are absoloutely no orcs what so ever. The lesser Gods are far closser to Greek gods and take on a far more physical role than the valar. Also the lesser gods being balrogs.. what? One majour difference between Khrone and Melkor is that Khrone is not the chief god in a sense, in fact he is one of the weakest. Melkor was the most powerful because he has a bit of all Illvatar's aspects. Khrone is pretty weak untill he gains a bit of power for himself.
Not once did a mention Orcs, what the Averteri turn into is very different. They're a lor more powerful than orcs and a lot more varried. They have no mind of their own what so ever and resemble the lesser god they are aligned to. Some are sort of demonic, others aren't physical beings, some look like they did before. They all resemble different forms of evil. Plus they are not corrupted in any form because they can't be. He literaly removes the brain and keeps the body, they are not tortured or anything.
The main thing to remember is that the characteristics of both Khrone the Averterti and the lesser gods are different to thosd of Melkor, the Valar and orcs. The valar it seems are more like powerful angels rather than gods. Melkor is basically Lucifer in many senses. Also please remember I am still drafting and there is a lot of changes to be made. I can agree that the story may perhaps be very simular however the gods are not like the valar and there are definately nor orcs, or elves and dwarves for that matter.