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Miseo
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Brutal. I like it.
I can see that being the absolute final step. The ultimate betrayal. But it only works as the final step, the "straw that broke the camel's back." Personally, if I were writing this (and the only way I can give advice is if I, at least temporarily, imagine myself writing it), I would show every step of the journey. Show every time he had to betray an ideal "for the greater good." Show every situation where those he relied on failed him. Show every torturous step.
Yep. That is the straw that broke the camel's back. As you suspected, he is immortal (so are the 12 antagonists (as you can imagine it is a very long battle)). He is an undead, and of a vampiric subtype (although still a bit different from vampires). He was killed by a dark god named Iah who bit out his throat. The image of Iah biting him to death was overlaid into himself (a type of magic called impartation) so he gained a portion of Iah's power and also the need to consume others. He begins his journey with the intention of finding out what happened to him and also to find answers for the unfortunate demise of someone he cared about (the events of volume 1). He gets dragged into a war between the Church and the Circle (a group of evil gods). And over time the quest to stop the Circle becomes more and more imperative, and the costs of doing so increase more and more.
I suppose then that the best course of action is to make the costs and consequences of doing so darker and darker?
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