Michael J. Tobias
Scribe
Personally, this would bug the hell out of me (her dying in the dream and then waking). But that's just me. I like the idea of a nightmare, as others point out, because being in prison under a death penalty would almost certainly lead to it (at least for relatively "normal" people). I also like the idea of something falling in the nightmare relating to the guard falling...or something similar used to stir her to consciousness. I prefer the original to the second version, though I'd still probably change the original where something falls...maybe the executioner drops his axe? Both that and the falling of the guard would be related in that they are unlikely and she would not imagine either of them happening.