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BWFoster78
Myth Weaver
Could this be more engaging for the reader if there was more show & less tell? I would tend to think so.
However, this depends solely on what you the author intend for this sentence. If getting Tasia's nervousness across is of minor concern or just some ambiance type description that really isn't relevant to the story or character development then I would say that telling, in the fashion it is written now, is just fine. Why go into detail if the details are unimportant?
On the other side, if you are trying to establish nervous tendencies as a character trait, or a specific event as something crucial and therefore apt to cause nervous reactions, then I feel it is imperative & crucial to show these through a character's responses.
There are a myriad of reasons why this reaction may be either important to your story or fairly irrelevant. The choice is yours to determine where this depiction lies and then show or tell accordingly.
I think you make a good point here.
Is it worth going through the effort to show if it's not important to the plot. But, if it's not important to the plot, should it then be included at all?