Lord Darkstorm
Sage
I don't think I'll be posting it here as I'm not good at giving critiques so it's not fair of me to ask for one
If you know how to read, you know how to critique. If you do nothing but one of three things it is very useful:
Huh? This doesn't make sense.
What? You're kidding, no one would believe that.
ZZZZZ Self explanatory.
Even if you don't know why something is boring, you can still point out where you lost interest, as well as where it doesn't make sense, or isn't very believable. So, don't feel you have to know the reason to give a critique, you just need to be able to point out where things aren't working for you. Let the author figure out what, or if, they need to do anything about it.
Now, the two first person pov in the same story, I think you will find it doesn't work well. First person is used for single pov stories. When you plan on using more than one, you use third. With third person you can change from one pov character to another with only a scene break and keep right on going. There is also an aversion to first person pov that a lot of people seem to have, so that is another thing to consider as well. For me, switching characters in first person is wrong. Some will probably disagree, but after a few decades of reading, I can't remember any books where it was done.
The other question is to really determine if the prolog is necessary. A prolog is usually something that isn't part of the main flow of the story, something that would happen before (or after sometimes) the story you are telling. Many of them really aren't needed, starting with the story should be good enough, and if there is something that is in the past that needs to be relayed, it can be done in a flashback, or just outright told at some point by the one who was there. Evil mastermind prologs scream cliche though.