Twook00
Sage
What are some ways to get a reader through a slow start?
When I say slow start, I mean that the hook does not appear for a few paragraphs (or sometimes pages) in.
Example: I'm writing a story about a super hero who survives the annihilation of mankind. The first scene is him sitting alone outside a bar in Boston, sipping a beer, when he sees a woman walk out of the bar. She's being followed by her drunk boyfriend who won't leave her alone. He grabs her. She slaps him. He smacks her. That's when the protagonist tells him to leave her alone.
The boyfriend ends up swinging a punch at the protags face and tries to headbutt him. The protag grabs him by his throat and jumps into the air. Then... he flies up, up, up with him.
Until this point, the reader has no idea my protag is anything special. It's just him sitting outside a bar, observing a domestic dispute. That said, if someone were to read my first line, "Rhys Ryan sat outside a bar..." would that lose them?
I know lots of stories will start with a very obvious "this is a hook" phrase. So mine could be, "Three hours before humanity was destroyed, Rhys Ryan sat outside a bar..."
What are other ways? I'm not really looking for hooks here, just other avenues to consider. Cut the first few paragraphs? Try using a different scene? What else?
When I say slow start, I mean that the hook does not appear for a few paragraphs (or sometimes pages) in.
Example: I'm writing a story about a super hero who survives the annihilation of mankind. The first scene is him sitting alone outside a bar in Boston, sipping a beer, when he sees a woman walk out of the bar. She's being followed by her drunk boyfriend who won't leave her alone. He grabs her. She slaps him. He smacks her. That's when the protagonist tells him to leave her alone.
The boyfriend ends up swinging a punch at the protags face and tries to headbutt him. The protag grabs him by his throat and jumps into the air. Then... he flies up, up, up with him.
Until this point, the reader has no idea my protag is anything special. It's just him sitting outside a bar, observing a domestic dispute. That said, if someone were to read my first line, "Rhys Ryan sat outside a bar..." would that lose them?
I know lots of stories will start with a very obvious "this is a hook" phrase. So mine could be, "Three hours before humanity was destroyed, Rhys Ryan sat outside a bar..."
What are other ways? I'm not really looking for hooks here, just other avenues to consider. Cut the first few paragraphs? Try using a different scene? What else?
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