TheokinsJ
Troubadour
I've started writing out a few chapters of my story, to find that perhaps my writing has taken it's toll from too many movies. It's fine normally but in the action scenes, I find that my writing resembles that of a scriptwriter for a movie. For example, I'll say phrases like "He turned" constantly throughout my scenes, for example; "He turned to see the raider running straight for him... He turned to see John overwhelmed by a dozen men... He turned-", you get the idea. I find that the way I write action sequences really is rushed and a constant pattern of a character seeing things, reacting to them, and then seeing more things and reacting to them. The way I picture it in my mind, is as if I am watching a fight scene in a movie, and I almost am straying more into the role of director than writer. I see it in my mind, it's just some of the things I think can't be put onto paper, because although they would work well in a movie, where the audience can visually see what I am trying to get across, writing these scenes seems to be a lot harder because I find I lose clarity and the reader often feels like they have no clue what's going on. Any tips on writing action/fight scenes and how to avoid repetition?