I'm working on a conversation at the moment and I've been trying to read up a bit on what to do an not to do. There's a rule about how if a quote is part of a paragraph then only the person speaking should be active in the paragraph. I get the idea behind that, but I found myself breaking the rule here:
What are your thoughts? Is it okay to break the rule here as it's obvious who's talking or would I be better off rewriting the paragraph?
Linus is meant to be the one doing the talking and the paragraph starts out referring to Linus but then goes on to be about Enar instead. Personally I feel it's clear enough that it's not Enar speaking, but then I'm the one writing it so I may have a bit too much background insight.“That's dumb. Enar, why do you only have seven days?” Linus stared at him with wide eyes and Enar started feeling a little awkward with all the unexpected attention. With his mouth full of food he couldn't answer and while he chewed fervently the questions kept coming.
What are your thoughts? Is it okay to break the rule here as it's obvious who's talking or would I be better off rewriting the paragraph?