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He was obviously contemplating something… he's a deep guy.
Voice takes years to develop. It's good that you're on the lookout for it, but it also sounds like you're trying to forceably bring it about. Is it there? Do I have it? Yea? Yeaaaa? <--- Chillax. Let the words flow.I see now, I think, where I was struggling… I was describing without knowing why.. what the purpose was to the descriptions. Every now and again I would nail it with voice… but there were those sections in between that had no direction.
Yes, it does make sense and to which my answer is: then take them out.
Since English is my second language I had to ask my husband what "on the nose" means, cause I've never heard the expression before. He said that it means "on the point" (and now I feel dumb ha).
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But really, whatever you want to call it, on-the-nose or whatever, the main thing is being able to identify what you don't like. The real trouble comes when nobody else likes the parts we do like, LOL.
Hi,
Sorry, I'm possibly going to derail the thread a little here. "On the nose" has two meanings in the comman vernacular as far as I know. The first is as has already been mentioned, a sort of boxing metaphor to indicate that you are exactly on target. Ie you punch somebody on the nose you hit them exactly where you wanted to.
This meaning as far as describing any bit of prose / dialogue would surely imply that you got things exactly right.
However there is a second meaning of the phrase, which is embodied in the question - "isn't that a bit on the nose?" In this case what is being asked is if whatever was said or done was a bit brutal / blunt. A criticism in short.
Now as to the OP I have never heard the phrase used in relation to any aspect of writing. But I would suggest going back to the source, and finding out how exactly the phrase was used and what was meant by it. Did they mean it was bang on? Or did they mean it was brutal and lacking in subtlety?
Cheers, Greg.
However there is a second meaning of the phrase, which is embodied in the question - "isn't that a bit on the nose?" In this case what is being asked is if whatever was said or done was a bit brutal / blunt. A criticism in short.
Now as to the OP I have never heard the phrase used in relation to any aspect of writing. But I would suggest going back to the source, and finding out how exactly the phrase was used and what was meant by it. Did they mean it was bang on? Or did they mean it was brutal and lacking in subtlety?
Cheers, Greg.
[SIZE=3]Frasier: So?
Roz: Well, his name is Roger, and we've been kinda goin' out for
the last couple of weeks.
Frasier: All right, tell us about him.
Roz: He's very sweet - and he's a garbage man, so go ahead and make
your jokes.
Frasier: What jokes? Why does everyone assume I look down on the
common man?
Niles: Oh, I've got a good one: So, even in his off time, he's
taking out the trash.
[I]Roz laughs along with him.[/I]
Frasier: Technically, that's really more about Roz. Now if I were to
make a joke about him, which of course I wouldn't, I'd say
he has a thing for Roz's can.
Roz: You two finished?
[I]They nod as she gets up.[/I]
Roz: And don't worry, I won't get dumped.
[I]She turns and goes to the counter.[/I]
Niles: I'd already passed on that.
Frasier: [B]Yes, it's a bit on the nose.[/B]
[I]They laugh. FADE OUT.[/I]
—S9 Ep5 “Love Stinks”
_____________
Roz: Well, that should certainly comfort the woman who called in
about her paranoia. Listen, do we have a leading man yet?
Frasier: No.
Roz: Well, you could do it.
Frasier: Oh don't be silly, Roz. It is a juicy part, it does call
for a strong voice, but believe me, my hands are full.
Gil: [I][enters][/I] Oh, Frasier, I've had a quick peek at your script
and I think I'd be perfect as Bull Kragen, the brutish
gamekeeper.
Frasier: [I][looks at Roz in disbelief][/I] [B]You know Gil, I think that's
just a bit too on the nose.[/B] [I][Gil agrees][/I] But you know who
you could play? Mr. Nigel Fairservice, drummed out of the
Royal Air Force under mysterious circumstances.
Roz: [I][to Frasier:][/I] With him playing it, they might not seem so
mysterious. [I][Frasier hits her][/I]
—S4 Ep18 “Ham Radio”
____________________
Ferguson: Quite right. However, a well-chosen gift might draw the eye
of Mr. Murchie as he considers a replacement for his now-
vacant seat on the board.
[I]Martin gives Frasier a "not bad" look.[/I]
Frasier: Well, if it'll make you happy, Ferguson, let's send him a
bottle of Chateau Belle Veux.
Ferguson: If I may, sir, I'm overheard Mr. Murchie speak fondly of the
family villa in Umbria. He may consider a wine from that
region especially thoughtful.
[I]Martin gives Frasier another look.[/I]
Frasier: [B]It's a little on the nose, but fine.[/B]
—S8 Ep5, “Taking Liberties”
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[Episode is about a creating a radio story on the space program.]
Roz: Frasier, let's move on, shall we? OK, let's talk music.
B.K.: What if we lead off the program with the music from "2001: A
Space Odyssey"?
Roz: Home run, B.K.!
[I]Frasier starts uhm-ing and ah-ing, shaking his head and clenching
his fists.[/I]
Roz: What is it, Frasier?
Frasier: Well, it - not to belittle your suggestion, B.K., which I love —
it's just that particular piece of music, uh, has been a bit,
ah, I don't know, a bit... overused. And it occurs to me that
perhaps an equally evocative, but less familiar piece of music
might better serve. Thank you.
Ed: You mean something like "The Planets" by Holst?
Frasier:[B] Exactly, it's a little less on the nose.[/B]
—S8 Ep16, “Docu Drama”[/SIZE]
Hi,
So essentially blunt then?! A criticism?! Just sayin!
Cheers, Greg.
… so is that what you do? You include the crappy bits and then search and destroy later?
Hi,
So essentially blunt then?! A criticism?! Just sayin!
Cheers, Greg.