BWFoster78
Myth Weaver
Take a sentence like this one:
He contented himself with chewing a little shaved variegation bark.
(Note: shaved variegation bark is a herb that I made up that provides a mild stimulant effect.)
As it doesn't impact the story significantly as to how much of the bark he chews, the words "a little" can be deleted from the sentence without changing the meaning much:
He contented himself with chewing shaved variegation bark.
I'm still struggling with the concept of "voice." Does keeping in words like "a little" here add "voice" or are they extraneous and, as such, in need of deletion?
Feel free to suggest other examples.
He contented himself with chewing a little shaved variegation bark.
(Note: shaved variegation bark is a herb that I made up that provides a mild stimulant effect.)
As it doesn't impact the story significantly as to how much of the bark he chews, the words "a little" can be deleted from the sentence without changing the meaning much:
He contented himself with chewing shaved variegation bark.
I'm still struggling with the concept of "voice." Does keeping in words like "a little" here add "voice" or are they extraneous and, as such, in need of deletion?
Feel free to suggest other examples.