Ireth
Myth Weaver
The issue of the day is with my novel Low Road; there's one specific moment I need help cementing. Close to the middle of the story, the main character, the vampire Olan, has long ago left his childhood home and settled into a new one, where he is quite comfortable. But I need a dramatic incident to occur which leads him away from that home so he can meet the villain and the rest of the plot can happen.
In the first draft, what leads Olan away is that his little sister is attacked and nearly raped by an unknown man, whom Olan feels bound to pursue and kill so he won't harm anyone else. The chase leads him to the clutches of another vampire, who steals his kill and then leads him to the underground city of the vampires, where Olan meets the villain and more plot happens.
I've decided against having attempted rape as the dramatic incident, but I still want there to be some malevolent person who does something to inadvertently get Olan chasing after him with intent to kill -- probably something very personal and deserving of that kind of anger. I'd prefer the person to be a human, because I want to keep the kill-stealing in there as well. Any ideas or thoughts?
In the first draft, what leads Olan away is that his little sister is attacked and nearly raped by an unknown man, whom Olan feels bound to pursue and kill so he won't harm anyone else. The chase leads him to the clutches of another vampire, who steals his kill and then leads him to the underground city of the vampires, where Olan meets the villain and more plot happens.
I've decided against having attempted rape as the dramatic incident, but I still want there to be some malevolent person who does something to inadvertently get Olan chasing after him with intent to kill -- probably something very personal and deserving of that kind of anger. I'd prefer the person to be a human, because I want to keep the kill-stealing in there as well. Any ideas or thoughts?