Is my plotline idea too gruesome?

Meh...I've seen worse. Kind of Dune'ish with the god emperor worm kid, and the guard they kept cloning. Go for it.

 

seems reasonable. Zombie stuff is done so much these days i think it will fly without a problem. i did have one experience where i may have taken the zombie thing too far if you want a cautionary tale (this was years ago so maybe people are more inured now)

But the plot was driven by a zombie (in Champions.. so they were a super hero.. sort of.. but for all intents and purposes.. a zombie) but she was functionally immortal, and if "killed" through dismemberment etc... she didn't stop functioning she just got very ineffectual (If you are a champions person you know it.. she lost all Presence: represents mental forcefulness, charisma, bravery and leadership) and very much focused on getting her parts back together.

anyway.. there was a group of fanatics trying to use her parts to obtain immortality, having sliced off their arms and taken parts etc.. ... yadda yadda yadda... but a lot of blood and guts and parts and a half mad girl running around armless with stolen organs etc that the heroes needed to help get her parts together..

maybe a little too over the top for that particular game group.

 

There is no way to tell how dark something is just from an outline. It all comes down to how you write it. The outline you describe can be used to write a comedy, a high epic fantasy tale or a gothic horror story, as well as everything in between.

So write it as a dark fantasy story and then that is what it will be.

 

Perfectly acceptable plot, but like everything, it always comes down to the execution.

The darkness is in the detail.

 

I agree. Besides, i don't think there is any such thing as "too gruesome" in an absolute sense. it's subjective and the reader will choose (if you do believe your story to not be for everyone, just put a warning on it or something). from what i read, though, not too gruesome.

 

I think that sounds fine! Some of my favorite authors write stories that might not be conventionally dark (like, using the undead) but are written in such a way that the main characters commit atrocities either by accident or as a flash decision in a tough situation. For instance, in Jemisin's the Fifth Season, the main character, who uses a kind of earth/rock magic, accidentally kills her entire village because her powers are intimately tied to her emotions. The story is full of tender moments, but as an apocalypse sets in, people do awful things. So, I agree with Prince of Spires and The Dark One.

Is the godlike character the main protagonist? Will we see inside his head? Does he do so out of malice? Or out of the necessity to survive? Does he feel like he's taken things to far?