Ireth
Myth Weaver
I'm having a few issues with the current scene in my latest WIP. The situation is thus: an evil elf by the name of Jarl is disguised as a human and spying through the good guys' castle for information to give to the Big Bad, Eydis. A minor character, Ailin, can slightly see through Jarl's disguise, and decides to spy on him to figure out what he's up to. At the moment Jarl is being given a tour of the castle by two of the major characters, Vidar and Eirikr; Ailin is in the same room doing some cleaning, as is his job (and the perfect excuse to go anywhere Jarl is, as long as there's something he can do there). Jarl is also questioning Vidar and Eirikr about the castle and its inhabitants while Ailin listens, unnoticed for the moment. The scene is from Ailin's POV.
Ailin isn't going to stop them from telling Jarl anything while they're with him, since that would make his attempts at secrecy moot; he's instead going to leave partway through the conversation, find Eirkir's brother Bjorn, and tell him to beware of Jarl and let others know he's a suspicious character. I'm not sure how much showing versus telling I should do with regards to what Ailin overhears the others talking about, even for this brief part of a scene; it'll be stuff he already knows, but he'll nonetheless be interested to listen so he knows what they are and aren't telling Jarl, just in case he is a bad guy as Ailin fears. Any advice on this?
Ailin isn't going to stop them from telling Jarl anything while they're with him, since that would make his attempts at secrecy moot; he's instead going to leave partway through the conversation, find Eirkir's brother Bjorn, and tell him to beware of Jarl and let others know he's a suspicious character. I'm not sure how much showing versus telling I should do with regards to what Ailin overhears the others talking about, even for this brief part of a scene; it'll be stuff he already knows, but he'll nonetheless be interested to listen so he knows what they are and aren't telling Jarl, just in case he is a bad guy as Ailin fears. Any advice on this?