Basic Question, need help!

hello all, my name is Patrick jo, as you can see i am new on this platform, actually i've been searching for this kind of website before, to help me get an inspiration for my story.

So the Idea for my writing is called Saint Michaelus, its an order created in medieval europe to terminate monster even sentient one like vampires or any...

so the plot is, when the mc was a child his village was attacked by werewolves, his parent was killed on that night but he was saved by an angel st michael, st micahel also give's him a mark, that on the plot progresses unlocked more superpower for mc to use... that is the premise on how will the writing progressed.
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i've been heavly thinking on this mc power, on first draft i want the mc to have the power like the main character of dishonored(a game if you're familiar) link wind blast(but mc can control wind not just limited to wind blast) , blink, temporary bend time.

it's just a first draft. and disclaimer only mc that have this supernatural power and monster hunter it's a hidden profession, mostly noble house have their kid hone their abilites on mosnter hunting, so many noble deciced to create a order of st michael as their patron. genre is : dark fantasy, supernatural, romance(optional) , harem(optional), gore, bloody.
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i have several question, and i kinda need an example to really understand it.
1. How to write an opening to a story?
all i know to create an opening is to use the template of narratives text such as : once upon a time and its similar type, and i think its not good enough.

2. i want to implement magic as very rare commodity, but is so strong that people that use magic can basically destroy an entire legion of army. but how strong should i make the magic?

Now that you've read the premise and my ideas, it should be noted that MC is the one who could use magic
except the monster, and there will be no witches.

so our MC is quite special his magic as i mention above is heavily influenced like corvo attano magic in dishonored game series.

should i make his magic really strong even for an earlier start (overpowered since the beginning) or mc train hard?

oh and as i mention above too, MC will meet many Supernatural Hunter too, they are mostly Nobles houses who dedicated their life to help their community in secret.

1. MC is not a Noble
2. MC have no proper training physically before
3. the mark will gives MC all the power he needed and its permanent and can never be erased.

now for the time and setting
1. 1878 when mc in teenage year
2. 1888 young adult (main strory take place)
3. Europe - all across the world, MC will travel the globe to hunt monster.


i think that's it for now, i just wanna know how people would react to this and how should i continue with this.
ugh sorry for the bad writing,

 

hi, thank you for your opinion, and the theme is not steampunk it's just normal tech, like in the order 1888 or red dead redemption 2, old classy era like that
so it would very similar to ac creed syndicate + monster and magic.

 

yes indeed, i was blown away with the magic in dishonored game and i ask my self, what if i make a story, about monster hunting secret order

Thanks for your appreciation

 

helloo thanks for reaching out, i will try to write a battle scene, i usually able to imagine it in my head, it just i have troubles in writing it down in word and i will try to create a descriptive scene too.

Regards.

 

i havent write any battle scene but, i've make a example on what the story would be like.
Detective scene
explanation : since all monster have different approach, our mc is trying to deduct the culprit

story : 1888, 2 november The order sent me and Edward to dutch indies(modern day indonesia), to help the dutch indies with their problem, on the public eyes it's just a murder commited by man, but their goverment assure us that this is done by no man, so we were sent to investigate it, the trip took 4months from london to batavia, at the time of the arrival i was suprised by the warm tropical weather that surround me, the feeling was calming and that took me to my past, while i was reminiscing, edward pat my shoulder and ask me to follow him, we went to dutch indies batavia division headquarter to examine the corpse, it was gory, the coprse was dismembered to the point it was unrecognizeable, "i never seen such brutality, it must be done by a large monster, but what kind of beast able to do this in a manner of second" said edward to me, when i look at the corpse i saw strange thing, while the corpse were dismembered i notice something, the uterus were missing, of all the organ only 1 was taken by the monster, so i decided to ask the local if they know a monster that did this, i learn that people in dutch indies were supersitious so it would be easy to talk to them, and then i ask a fishermen at the dock, "sir by any chance did you know a monster that took female uterus", his face turn pale, its like that he is scared to answer my qustion "its fine sir i just want to know", "anuu... itu mah bukan kerjaan mahluk tapi ini kerjaan kuntil anak mister(ummm,,, that is not a work of some beast but i was the work of kuntil anak", i was suprised as i never heard such creature, he explained that kuntil anak was a vengenful spirity of a deceased pregnant lady, who died during child birth, now she roam as a vengenful spririt to eat baby fetus, and she target only pregnant woman" i dont know what to say as thank the man, in my thought in my life i never encounter a ghost before and i decided to tell edward.

i think that would one of my scene on my journey around the globe.

if you have any thought on that it would appreciated, and sorry i have mistakes on grammar or any sentences for that matter as english was not my first language.

 

hii lynea, i've write a scene for my story you can try to read it in my reply to the moderator

thanks, and tell me what you think

 

thank you for your kind advice
since magic is a rare commodity, i think mc will struggle quite a bit, to learn his power without being seen on his jobs and dot forget mana, how will a world without magic can fulfill depleted mana of a magician, i havent thought of that yet

i have written an example of one of the scene, in my reply to the moderator, feel free to give me advice, thanks

 

thank youu for your kind support

 

i havent heard of indonesian fantasy writing story forum(i will look into this further), and indonesian arent known for fantasy story or any good narratives book for that matter, according to statistic indonesian have low literacy rate. they are not the perfect audiences in my opinion, they dont read story they usually like gaming youtuber more or people flaunting their wealth content rather than story.

thanks for your advice.