random Short dialog

"Why do you act like you do?" Sabina demanded. "Silly and free spirited all the time!"
"Why are you so tough on me? Pata responded
"I am trying to protect you from the dark!" Sabina replaced the knife in her bandolier.
Pata blinked and replied softly with a smile,
"I am trying to show you the light."


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Not sure where in my WIP I will use this, but this is the basics of the conversation. I might need to tweak it a little more.

 

Missed that one.
Should be a end quote and a period in the sentence.

 

The exchange is unwritten, but you are correct.
I think by the time I use it, the reader will know what she is talking about.
I think I threw it in to show it in this clip.

Skip.knox
Knowing what and how to edit something is difficult.
You really can't truly edit a paragraph without looking at everything that contributes to that paragraph.
Each sentence is a building block, removing some will improve a story, removing the wrong ones could detract from the story.
Removing the wrong one could destroy the mood or just be a missed opportunity.

In this case, he pointed out a part that I added for placement here. So it was fluff.
Thanks.