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Trouble describing something

Of the two I prefer the second description. You could also explore various metephores that occur in nature such as "light glinting off the smooth surface of a pond changing his appearance..." or " like flickering shadows that stab at Ailin's eyes giving a distinctly different form in quick flashes..." Just a few quick example, but you get where I'm going with them I think.
 
Of the two I prefer the second description. You could also explore various metephores that occur in nature such as "light glinting off the smooth surface of a pond changing his appearance..." or " like flickering shadows that stab at Ailin's eyes giving a distinctly different form in quick flashes..." Just a few quick example, but you get where I'm going with them I think.
 
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