Mad Swede
Auror
What you seem to want to do is make a joke about the so-called Aerith and Bob trope. It's been done before, in various parodies. Readers may get the joke, but it won't be new to them so you've quite a bit of work to do to make your version of the joke original.I'm not sure how common/uncommon this is with books and other media.
But with video games it happens a lot. Particularly in Final Fantasy. Heck, sometimes it happens in Zelda (Though very rarely)
Everyone seems to have names like Elliot etc, you know typical fantasy or fantasy leaning names.
Then there's always the one guy/girl with a 'normal' name.
You know, a guy named Bill or a girl named Joe/Mary etc.
In my book I plan to make fun of this (because the whole 'thing' of the book is poking fun at video game tropes) by having a village/town of people with regular name and the one 'oddball' with a fantasy name. But I do wonder if the bit would run a little thin. There's a strong chance readers won't get the 'joke' as well. Since the characters only draw attention to it once.
This is always the danger with in-jokes, and it's one reason why they so often fall flat with the wider readership. Gamers might get the joke, but no-one else will and eventually these others get tired and stop reading.Some of the in jokes I'm making are fairly obvious. (at least to me they are ? )
Using an expression like "check" doesn't quite work the way you think it does. Sure, as roleplayers we talk about doing a "check". But the expression also gets used when playing chess, when controlling the speed of a car or train and in a number of other situations. So you need to read widely before you start using expressions like that as the basis for a joke - and if you read widely you may also find that you can make the joke work on several levels, as Sir Terry Pratchett did in his books.Like one of them I reference a couple of times is about doing a 'check' or rolling a 'D twenty' both of these are blink and miss it moments. But I feel like the joke is obvious. (DND) I feel like most people know about DND these days, even if it's just from the movie from a while ago.
Sorry, that is something I as reader and writer don't forgive. Whilst you're being brave admitting it here, that is the sort of thing you should think vert carefully about admitting in any half serious writing community because it makes you look both badly read and ignorant. No-one will take you seriously as a writer with those sorts of gaps in your knowledge, not given where you live.I believe he's the guy that wrote Olliver Twist right? Forgive me for making the mistake lol I have heard his name before. (though I forget which book)
Much as I hate to write this, and based on what you've written in all your various posts here, I don't think you have read anything like enough fantasy and other genres to make your story work. What people often fail to understand about writers like Sir Terry Pratchett is how widely and how much those writers read as the basis for their writing. Those same people also fail to understand how much good writing depends on the ability to observe people and how they interact with one another.As for the other jokes, the book isn't explicitly about poking fun at video game tropes in fantasy, just fantasy in general? But I will admit a few of the references are super leaning toward video games.
Comedy is more than just poking fun at something like video game conventions. It's far more subtle, in that it also takes in wider aspects like people and society. Watching (or better still listening to) a good stand-up comedian can be very revealing, as that sort of act requires good observational skills and a broad understanding of people, culture and society.
As for names, I'd echo what Prince of Spires wrote. Do your research. What some think of as modern names or odd names may not be that different. It all depends on where and when the story is set.

Sage